Analysis - On First (Draft) Opening Sequence

This clip is the produce from our first filming seesion. Although we thought it was successful we made a few mistakes which then came apparent during the editing stage. In the first shot it jilts causing the shot to jump from one shot to another. Also these two different shots have two different background noises so the shots do not flow. The next shot shows a close up of Alicia (Juliet) and the sound goes fuzzy. This close up is proficient but the shot gets hazy and loses focus. The two shot which comes after is good but it jumps to quickly to the close up of he mobile phone.The next couple of shots flow but the background noise changes from each one. There is then a quick jump to her facial experession where she is suppose to hear Ashley(Olu) and Shaniqua (Christina) giggling and making noises. We then she a mid shot of Alicia (Juliet) putting her mobile in her pocket and taking out the prgnacy test this transitions really quickly to a shot of her looking at the test and walking off with no reaction. This is not affective as it doesn't clearly show what is going on and the shots jump to quickly making it difficult to follow. Alicia (Juliet) then runs out of the park and the camera follows. There is then a zoom in of the pregnacy test which is focused and clearly but it zoom in two quickly. The shot then jumps to Jermaine (Toba) getting up from the swing and running after Alicia (Juliet) as he sees something is wrong. The shot the focuses on Alicia (Juliet) when she stops running and turns around to Jermaine and tells him whats wrong. We felt this shot was not good because the dialogue was falsified and not really realistic whereas in a urban drama things have to be pragmatic otherwise it defeats the objective of a urban drama. There is then a shot of Jermaine bursting through the park gates screaming at Alicia to wait then there is digetic music playing whilst the credits come in. We felt this was quite effective as it acts as a pre-credit sequence which is used in many films and sometimes in TV Dramas. Overall we feel that this could have be improved and we could use our skills to produce a better quality piece of work so we decided to start again and use this as a exemplar opening sequence to helps us see what areas we need to work on.